「ＮＨＫ基礎英語３」一年間チャレンジ 101日目 94日目Writing"Tanabata"添削結果 /年齢を言い訳にしない

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Tanabata

✖"Tanabata" is a type of Japanese Festival celebrated on July 7th, as known as the Star Festival.
〇"Tanabata" is a Japanese Festival celebrated on July 7th. It is also known as the Star Festival.

✖This festival was introduced from China.
〇This festival was introduced to Japan by China.
Or: This festival originated in China.
This festival comes from China

〇It is said that a couple, the star Alter and the star Vega, could meet only once a year on this day.

✖If it rains the day, they will not be able to meet due to the flood of the Milky Way. Therefore, people pray for good weather.
〇However, if it rains, they will not be able to meet due to the flood of the Milky Way. Therefore, people pray for good weather.

〇On this day, some people write their wishes on colorful strips of paper, called Tanzaku.
Alternative: During Tanabata, some people write their wishes on colorful strips of paper, called Tanzaku.

〇After writing their wishes, they hang their Tanzaku on bamboo branches.

〇It is believed that wishes come true when they write on the paper strips and hang them on the bamboo.

✖When I was a kid, my mom used to buy a bamboo branch at a flower shop and decorate it with paper ornaments from one week before that day.
〇When I was a kid, my mom used to buy a bamboo branch at a flower shop and decorate it with paper ornaments one week before the day of the festival.

✖My sister and I wrote each wishes on the paper and hung them every year.
〇Every year, my sister and I each wrote wishes on the paper and hung them up.

✖I didn’t remember what I wrote and whether my wishes came true or not, but I had a great time with all family together on that day.
〇I don’t remember what I wrote or whether my wishes came true or not, but I do remember having a great time with all of my family members on that day.

✖My mom always tried to show me the Japanese beautiful culture.
〇My mom always tried to show me the beautiful parts of Japanese culture.

✖I want to cherish the tradition.
〇I want to continue cherishing this tradition.

今回もGoGoオンライン英会話のNicole先生に添削してもらいました。

Nicole先生の紹介は下記投稿の後半に詳しく載せてあります！

いつも丁寧な解説と添削後の音声を提供してくれます。

GoGoオンライン英会話、おススメです！

＊今日の感想

英語学習を再開して以来、年上の素敵な女性とお話する機会が増えました。

みなさんとても忙しい日々を送っているのですが、そんな中でも時間を見つけて英語の発音を一生懸命練習したり、日々の出来事を自分のボキャブラリーの範囲でどんな風に伝えようか考えたりしているそうです。

そして明らかに上達し輝いている姿を目の前で見ていると「年齢を言い訳にしてチャレンジしないのはもったいないことだ」と思わせてくれます。

そんな方々に囲まれて本当に私は幸せです。いつもありがとうございます。

＊おまけ

今日の朝食

メロンのフルーツサラダ（メロン、グリーンレタス、ブロッコリースプラウト、プチトマト、ズッキーニ、赤パプリカ、スナップえんどう、カッテージチーズ）、コーンパン（coulis）、バナナヨーグルト（ヨーグルト：ギリシャヨーグルト無糖）コーヒー（NESPRESSO アルペジオ）

今日はメロンサラダでした。サラダのドレッシングは、酢、オリーブオイルに塩コショウとシンプルです。今日英会話のNico先生から美味しそうなニンジンドレッシングを教わったので、今度作ってみたいと思います。

それでは今日も最後まで読んで頂きありがとうございました。