How to create a happy society　英語版

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以下が僕が応募した感想文だ。

I think society is made by humans. So when the people who make the society are good , society would be good.I have 3 reasons I think education is important.

First, I think education makes the world a better place.  For example, Thomas Alba Edison was a boy who got curries at a lot of things. So Thomas Alba Edison got attracted in class. That made his teacher annoyed. So the teacher talked with Thomas Alba Edison's mother and asked Thomas Alba Edison to stop studying in school. But his mother didn’t  give up. HIs mother taught Edison at her house. Edison found out that he loved science. He didn’t give  up on science. He tried and tried.These young times made edison hurt to try a lot.
Second, we have to communicate with each other to make a good society. In language there are a lot of ways to ask. We need to choose the correct language to share ideas. 
Finally, we are in society 4.0 which is information society. We have to learn how to avoid fraud. Because they are so dangerous.
In conclusion, I think that education makes society a better place.

But I am still an elementary school kid. I can't be a teacher right now. But my dream is to be a teacher so what I can do now is, see how good a teacher is teaching oher. To be a good teacher.  I have to concentrate on the words teachers are using.
I think I have to be flexible to respect each other.  Because I was a school non-attendance student. But one teacher was so flexible to me and I thought school was fun and now my school is fun.

Therefore I should concentrate on class from now on.

読んでくれて、ありがとうございます

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