IELTS ライティングフルエッセイ

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TOPIC Mobile devices have greatly improved the quality of our life.To what extent do you agree?
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The ubiquity of mobile phones with widespread use of social networking service
and numerous types of apps has transformed the way we live fundamentally.
Given this, I agree with this viewpoint to some extent in that the emergence of user-friendly mobile devices has fostered our communication in the 21st century;however the improper use of mobile devices has also negative ramifications on many parts of our lives.

One notable advantage of utilizing mobile phones is that we can reach friends and parents without any physical and geographical limitations. Such a case can be seen in case of natural disasters like earthquake, typhoon and flood. These chaotic events bring diverse array of disruptions into public transportation, thus preventing us from identifying our mutual safety. With the presence of mobile phones, however, it enables us to contact with each other, thereby ensuring whether or not we are in safe condition.
Another beneficial point is that there are ample chances to communicate with other people regardless of physical and geographical factors. Thanks to the rapid arrival of social media like Twitter, Facebook and instagram, it is possible for us to interact with each other. This progress helps not only encourage our lively communications but also expand our horizons. For instance, if we want to know how to wrestle with climate change in a cooperative manner, the effective use of social media allows us to witness other people's perspectives on climatic issue. This interactive activity raises our awareness of what we should do to solve grave international problems.

Nevertheless, there are some negative consequences that have stemmed from social problems in recent days. For instance, online crimes and bullying issues conspicuous in schools have generated serious problems such as suicide and phychological problems. These insurmountable challenges are highly likely to compromise our future. Specifically, as one classic example, there are many young people who withdraw from society due to traumatic disorder resulting from online bullying. In the worst-case scenario, such blighted people with gloomy views attempt suicide, thereby deteriorating social order.

In conclusion, increased availability of social media and apps has greatly contributed to safety confirmation and growth of opportunities to interact with various people.
At the same time, however, social problems such as suicide and psychological disorder have aggravated the quality of our life.