OREO writing My hobby

My hobby is singing. Because singing is fun. for example I like singing my favorite songs. such us Doraemon and YOASOBI. Therefore, I like to sing songs. Because singing is fun. Next time I want to sing a song "Hanataba".

Chat GPT先生の添削結果

Original:
My hobby is singing. Because singing is fun. for example I like singing my favorite songs. such us Doraemon and YOASOBI. Therefore, I like to sing songs. Because singing is fun. Next time I want to sing a song "Hanataba".

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Revised Version (OREO Structure):

Opinion:
My hobby is singing.

Reason:
I enjoy singing because it’s fun and makes me happy.

Example:
For example, I love singing my favorite songs, such as the Doraemon theme song and songs by YOASOBI. They always cheer me up and are enjoyable to perform.

Opinion restated:
That's why I love singing; it’s fun and brings me joy. Next time, I want to sing the song "Hanataba."

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主な修正ポイント:

1. 文法の修正:
   "Because singing is fun" → "I enjoy singing because it’s fun"
   文のつながりを改善し、主張をより自然に表現しました。

2. 具体例の強化:
   "such us Doraemon and YOASOBI" → "such as the Doraemon theme song and songs by YOASOBI"
   より具体的に、例として「Doraemonのテーマソング」や「YOASOBIの歌」と明確にしました。

3. 繰り返しの回避:
   同じフレーズ "Because singing is fun" を繰り返さないように、最後の意見再述部分を工夫して "That's why I love singing; it’s fun and brings me joy" に変更しました。

4. 文章の流れを改善:
   "Therefore, I like to sing songs" のような不必要な繰り返しを避け、文章全体の流れがスムーズになるようにしました。

この修正により、文章がより自然で説得力のあるものになり、内容も明確になっています。

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