「ＮＨＫ基礎英語３」一年間チャレンジ　番外編　自作英作文添削結果

４月１２日に投稿した英作文を英会話レッスンで添削してもらいました。

投稿したものはこちら ↓

添削結果

My room

〇：When I was a kid, I shared a room with my sister.（修正なし）

×：The good point of sharing a room was I didn’t feel lonely in the middle of the night or when I needed someone to listen.（下記のように修正）　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　〇：The good thing about sharing a room was that I didn’t feel lonely in the middle of the night or when I needed someone to listen to me.（修正後）

〇：The bad point was there was no privacy.（修正なし）

〇：So, I asked my parents if I could have my own room.（修正なし）

〇：When I was 15, I got my own room! I was so excited!（修正なし）

✖️：But, I realized that my sister was always there whenever I was happy and disappointed. I took her for granted.（下記のように修正）
○：But I soon realized that my sister had always been there for me whenever I was feeling happy or disappointed. I had taken that for granted.

〇：As we got older, we got closer. We try to support each other.（修正なし）

×：I really appreciate it.（下記のように修正）
〇：I really appreciate our relationship.

今回添削してもらったのは、GoGooオンライン英会話のNicole先生

Nicole先生の紹介は下記投稿の後半に詳しく載せてあります！

レッスンでも添削結果を詳しく解説してもらっています！GoGOオンライン英会話の先生全員おススメです！