【英検準1級#12】紙の新聞の購読をやめる人が増えるか【No】

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【ライティング】
　本日は、「紙の新聞の購読をやめる人が増えるか」がテーマ。
【NO】の立場で書きました。
今日は、ボスニアの先生がネット不調のためお休みとなり(T_T)、
フィリピンの先生にお願いしました。
先生によってと、国にもよるのだと思うけど、書き言葉であっても、英語の感じがかなり違うなって改めて感じております。

Agree or disagree:
People will stop subscribing to printed newspapers in the future.

＊I wrote it from the "No" side.

◎Points
Reliability
Convenience

５【先生添削後】
【a final copy 】
　　Nowadays, there are many substitutes for printed newspapers. However, I think people will continue to subscribe to traditional newspapers.
　　First of all, print newspapers are more reliable, thus making them more superior than digital ones. Digital news articles can be edited or erased even after publishing. On the other hand, printed newspapers cannot be edited nor removed once it is published. This makes writers and editors more careful when writing articles.
　　Secondly, printed newspapers are convenient. You can look at the whole page of the newspaper in just one look. You don't have to scroll down the screen pages like what you do on your computer or phone.  People appreciate the convenience of printed newspapers for grasping the overview of whole news not only headlines.
　　In conclusion, I think people will choose print newspapers to subscribe even though they have many other choices.

４【清書+Grammarly添削後】
　　
　　Nowadays, there are many substitutes for printed newspapers. However, I think people will continue to subscribe to the paper version's newspapers.
　　First of all, print newspapers are superior to online news at the point of reliability. Digital news articles can be edited or erased even after publishing. While printed one will remain the original in their reader's hand. The fact makes writers and editors more responsible for reliable articles.
　　Secondly, printed newspapers are convenient. You can browse some news at the same time on a page of it. You don't need to scroll screens of phones or computers to do so. People appreciate the convenience of printed newspapers for grasping the overview of whole news not only headlines.
　　In conclusion, I think people will choose print newspapers to subscribe even though they have many other choices.

３【2の先生添削後】

【a rough draft after the tutor's check】
　2【1のGrammarly添削後】

【a rough draft after the Grammarly check】
　　Nowadays, there are many substitutes for printed newspapers. However, I think people will continue to subscribe to the paper version's newspapers.
　　One reason is about reliabilities. An online news article can be edited or erased even after publishing. While printed one will remain the original in their reader's hand. The fact gives writers and editors the responsibilities to make articles reliable.
　　Another reason is that many fans of printed newspapers think it's more convenient than digital ones. You can see some news on a page without scrolling screen.
　　In conclusion, I think people will choose printed newspapers to read even if they have many other choices.

1【添削前】　
20語、語数が足りないです。

【a rough draft】
　　Nowadays, there are many substitutes of printed newspapers. However, I think people will continue to subscribe to paper version's newspapers.
　　One reason is about reliabilities. Online news article can be edited or eraced even after publishing. While, printed one will remain the original in reader's hand. The fact gives writers and editors responsiblities to make articles reliable.
　　Another reason is that many fans of printed newspapers think it's more convenient than desital ones. You can see many news in a page without scrolling screen.
　　In conclusion, I think people will choose paper edition to read even if they have many another choice.