The allure of music 〜音楽の魅力〜

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ネイティブチェックも受けているものになりますので、太字の英文はぜひ参考になれば幸いです。

①I'd like to make a presentation about music, which holds tremendous power, and I aim to convey the importance of music.
Before my presentation, I will explain how I became interested in music. I began learning the piano at my parents’ recommendation and once won first prize at a piano concert. Since then, I have developed a fondness for the piano and music, and I occasionally play the piano. Upon entering university, I joined a light music club for some time.
Returning to my presentation, I will divide it into two points about music.

②To begin with, music has an influential impact on people at all times. For instance, when you feel sad or want to cry, bright or happy songs may lift your spirits. Or, when you are striving to achieve certain goals, music can motivate you to persevere.

★lift someone's spirits（人）を元気づける
★persevere 〜し続ける

③Secondly, songs can vividly evoke memories of the times when you heard them. Listening to memorable songs allows you to recall those moments. In my case, when I was in Hiroshima during my elementary school days and preparing to move to Saitama, I often listened to Kyogo Kawaguchi’s song ‘Sakura.’ Whenever I hear this song, I am transported back to the days I spent in Hiroshima.
From these experiences, I am convinced that music possesses immense power. So, whenever you face challenges or undertake difficult tasks, let’s turn to music.