【英作文練習②】趣味勉強

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今日は勉強することについて。

①趣味勉強！
＜添削前＞
I'am studying for fun.It's not forced by anyone.
In weekend if I had a time, I like to go to starbucks for study.
<添削後>
I am studying for fun. I am not forced by anyone.
 In weekends if I have time. I like studying while drinking coffee at Starbucks.

②ラグビー最優先！
<添削前>
When I was in high school, I seldom study.
I was playing and thinking rugby alltime.
<添削後>
When I was in high school, I seldom study.
I was playing and thinking rugby all the time.

③文武両道！
<添削前>
I have enjoyed studying since I'm in University.
I miraclousy didn't fail a class in first exam at University.
At that time, I thought maybe I can do it, so I was able to continue study untill graduate.
<添削後>
I have enjoyed studying since I'm in University.
I miraculously passed my first exam when I entered the University.
At that time, I thought I could do it, so I was able to continue my studies and graduated.

④おかげさまで！
<添削前>
There are a background in I can enjoy studying University.
It is just my choose of major.
I choosed physical education corse because my father advised me.
He told me you should choose major what you like.
Thanks to him, I have had habit enjoying study.
<添削後>
I had a reason why I enjoyed studying in the University.
It was my personal choice to major in Physical Education. My father advised me to choose a course that I love and suggested Physical education. I am grateful for him because since then I had a habit of studying,

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