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課題

Engaging with Social media.
I use "X" frequently. "X" compare to others Social media, "X" had maniac information more than others that I would correct professional knowleage.
I don't use Others Social media. I feeled there are role has grown commercial.
Social media is very convenient and intersting, but there are eat up a we valuable time and creating unnecessary desires.

Get along with there.

書きたい英語

SNSとの付き合い方に向き合う
私はXを頻繁に利用しています。他のSNSに比べて、マニアックな情報が多く専門的な知識を集められるからです。
その他のSNSはほとんど使用していないです。商用としての役割が大きくなった気がしたからです。
SNSはとても便利で面白いですが、わたしたちの時間を恐ろしいほど食いつぶし、不要な物欲まで生み出す様になりました。

うまく付き合って行きたいですね。

AI様のご指摘

文法ミス:

• Engaging with Social media.

  • "Social media" は複数形なので、"Engaging with social media." となります。

• I use "X" frequently.

  • 文頭に主語が必要です。 "I use "X" frequently." となります。

• "X" compare to others Social media, "X" had maniac information more than others that I would correct professional knowleage.

  • この文は文法的に誤っており、意味が不明瞭です。書き換える必要があります。

• I don't use Others Social media.

  • "Others" は不要です。 "I don't use other social media." となります。

• I feeled there are role has grown commercial.

  • "feeld" は "felt" の誤字です。また、"there are role" は "there is a role" の誤字です。さらに、"has grown commercial" は不自然な表現です。書き換える必要があります。

• Social media is very convenient and intersting, but there are eat up a we valuable time and creating unnecessary desires.

  • "intersting" は "interesting" の誤字です。また、"there are eat up a we valuable time" は不自然な表現です。書き換える必要があります。

修正箇所

• Engaging with Social media.

  • -> Engaging with social media.

• I use "X" frequently.

  • -> I use "X" frequently.

• "X" compare to others Social media, "X" had maniac information more than others that I would correct professional knowleage.

  • -> This sentence is grammatically incorrect and unclear. It needs to be rewritten.

• I don't use Others Social media.

  • -> I don't use other social media.

• I feeled there are role has grown commercial.

  • -> I felt there is a role that has become more commercial.

• Social media is very convenient and intersting, but there are eat up a we valuable time and creating unnecessary desires.

  • -> Social media is very convenient and interesting, but it can eat up a lot of our valuable time and create unnecessary desires.

修正後

Engaging with social media.
I use "X" frequently. "X" is a social media platform that focuses on professional networking. I find that it has more niche information than other social media platforms, which I find helpful for keeping my professional knowledge up-to-date.
I don't use other social media. I feel that they have become more commercialized and less focused on connecting with people.
Social media is very convenient and interesting, but it can eat up a lot of our valuable time and create unnecessary desires. It's important to be mindful of how we use social media and to set limits for ourselves.

修正稿

Engaging with social media.
I use "X" frequently. "X" is a social media platform that focuses on professional networking. I find that it has more niche information than other social media platforms, which I find helpful for keeping my professional knowkedge up-to-date.
I don't use other social media. I feel that they have become more commercialized and less focused on connecting with people.
Social media is very convenient and interesting, but it can eat up a lot of our valuable time and create unnecessary desires. It's important to be mindful of how we use social media and to set limits for ourselves.

答え合わせ

ソーシャルメディアとの関わり。

私は "X "を頻繁に使っている。「X」は、プロフェッショナルなネットワーキングに特化したソーシャルメディア・プラットフォームだ。他のソーシャルメディアよりもニッチな情報が多く、専門的な知識を最新に保つのに役立っている。

他のソーシャルメディアは使いません。他のソーシャルメディアは商業化され、人とのつながりを重視していないように感じる。

ソーシャルメディアはとても便利で面白いものですが、貴重な時間を浪費し、不必要な欲望を生み出すこともあります。ソーシャルメディアの使い方に気を配り、自分に制限を設けることが大切だ。