20190326_IDIYによる英作文の添削③

20190324_課題あり英作文
"Daily routine that you can't cut corners even through you know it is inefficient."

■英文原稿
①I can't help watching videos on a video sharing site called Niconico when I have free time even eating or taking a bath.
②I love watching videos my favorite game player playing TV games with talking.
③To the honest, I should watch any English media while I watch such videos.

■添削結果
①I can't help watching videos on a video sharing site called Niconico when I have free time, even when I'm eating or taking a bath.
②I love watching videos of my favorite gamer playing video games while talking.
③To be honest, I should watch English videos instead of watching such videos.

■辞書で検索した箇所・添削箇所
①even when I'm -ing …(私が)～している時でさえ
②「～しながら」=while
③To be honest

20190325_和文英訳　(提出:Philademia)
「クレジットカードで支払った商品の返品の場合、請求取消し日がご利用のクレジットカード会社の締め日を跨いだ際にはご返金は次回のお引き落とし日となります。」

■英文原稿
①When we would refund you of goods bought by your credit card,
②you would be given the refund at next account deducation
③if your credit card over the limit date.

■添削結果
①When we refund for the goods bought with your credit card,
②you will receive the refund on the next account
③if the cancellation is after your credit card cut-off date.

■辞書で検索した個所・添削個所(今回は難しかった！)
①refund for ＜物＞…＜物＞を払い戻す
・クレジットカードで買ったもの…the goods bought with your credit card
②receive the refund…返金を受け取る
・on the next account…次回の引き落とし日(?)　
③cut-off date …締切日

■感想
refund for とrefund を自動詞で使う理由や、
on the next account(次の口座の日) という英訳の理由が分からない。
IDIYの教師の質は本当にバラバラであることを実感した１件。

20190326_英文和訳　(提出：Cowrie)
「あの美術館はさまざまなアーティストの作品の貴重なコレクションを有しています。絵画だけではなく、彫刻や像、オブジェも置いています。各フロアはとても広いためすべての展示物を見るにはまる一日以上かかると思います。」

■英文原稿
①That musium has precious collections of works by various artists.
②There are not only artworks but also curvings and sculptures.
③I think that every floors are so large that you will take all of day to see all the exhibition.

■添削結果
①That museum has precious collections of works by various artists.
②There are not only paintings but also carvings, statues and objects.
③I think that every floor is so large that it will take all day to see all the exhibitions.

■辞書で検索した個所・添削個所
①museum…スペルミス。スペルチェック機能があるが、アプリ版にはないため発生した。
②A but also B …AだけでなくBも　
「AもBも」という言い方を忘れてしまって検索した。
③every floor …every は単数となる。
・it will take all day …＜時＞の主語はyou ではなく it.
・all the day ではなく all day.

■コメント
・最後の文は「I think」を外せる
・the floors are very extensive (広大な)
・take more than a whole day　という表現もできる。